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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011 2bQGx

The line graph represents the three different types of inquires collected by a Tourist information office in a particular city during six months period of time in 2011. Overall, It can be seen that in-person inquires were the most common choice among the there options. Firstly, the Tourist information office received approximately 900 telephonic inquires in January, and the number of these inquires was over twice that inquires received in person. Furthermore, telephone inquires number fluctuated and reached at nearly 1000 in March. While in-person inquires increased moderately till March with around 800 inquires. Moreover, from March to June, inquires by telephone rose with just near to 1600 in the last month ( June). Whereas, the in-person numbers grew significantly and crossed 1800 inquires by June, which was the highest quantity of inquires. On the other hand, in the starting month, letter/email inquires were popular with around 800. However, after January the number decreased and reached at just under 400 in May, also in June month the email inquires number was the same as the previous month.

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