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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. kyJn
In my opinion, it is correct that computer can make life more easier. But, if only we know how to operate a computer. And it can be more easier if we use computer for light usage. for example, we want to watching a movie in youtube using the computer. It is a simple thing, right? we only need to make sure the computer was connect to the internet, and then we open the browser, seacrh for youtube, then write the title of movie that we want to watch. It easy to use compute to do something with simple step. But, yeah computer can also become a complex and stressful thing if we do not know how to use it correctly. For example, when we want to make a calculation data by microsoft excel in computer, maybe it is easy to operate for those people who are used to it. But for those who use it for the first time, it could be hard. They need to know about what are the item and it usage in microsoft excel. They need to learn how to use microsoft excel from several books, or with other people who already understand how to use it. So, easy or not to use computer, it depends from how far we know about the computer. Computer is just a device, but people who has created it, so there is no difficult if we know how to master it. And the right way to master it is learn about it.
In my opinion, it is correct that computer can
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life
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.
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, if
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we
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how to operate a computer. And it can be
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more easier
if we
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use
computer for light usage.
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for
example, we want to
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watching
a movie in
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youtube
using the computer. It is a simple thing, right?
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we
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only
need to
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sure the computer was
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connect
to the internet, and then we open the browser,
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seacrh
for
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youtube
, then write the title of movie that we want to
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watch
.
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It
easy to
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compute to do something with simple step.
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But
, yeah computer can
also
become a complex and stressful thing if we do not
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know
how to
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it
correctly
.
For example
, when we want to
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make
a calculation data by
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microsoft excel
in computer, maybe it is easy to operate for those
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people
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who
are
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to it.
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But
for those
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who
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use
it for the
first
time, it could be
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hard
. They need to
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know
about what are the item and
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it usage
in
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microsoft excel
. They need to learn how to
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use
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microsoft excel
from several books, or with other
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people
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who
already understand how to
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use
it.
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So
, easy or not to
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computer, it
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depends
from how far we
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know
about the computer. Computer is
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just
a device,
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people
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who
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has
created it,
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so
there is no difficult if we
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know
how to master it. And the right way to master it is
Consider using a past participle here: "learned", "learnt".
learn
about it.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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