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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. GB6o
The graphic shows us the number of enquires received by the tourist. It compares the information in particular city during six-period in 2011. According to the line graphic, there are 3 different method that were used by tourist. We can see that the all 3 methods that were used by tourist had a significant increase with in person enquires was the most common choice among 3 option in this six-month period. We can asumme that tourist information department or office received 900 enquires in January, which was the highest number from all 6 months. We can see that by letter / email reached their lowest point at the end of the time while in person and telephone methods increased significantly in their last three month. I hope there are more tourist that will go to my country Indonesia.
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received by the
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. It compares the information
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city during six-period in 2011.

According to the line graphic, there are 3
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different
method that were
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used
by
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tourist
. We can
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see
that the all 3 methods that were
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used
by
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tourist
had a significant increase with in person
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enquires
was the most common choice among 3 option in this six-month period.

We can
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asumme
that
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tourist
information department or office received 900
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enquires
in January, which was the highest number from all 6 months.
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We
can
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see
that by letter / email reached their lowest point at the
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end
of the time while in person and telephone methods increased
significantly
in their last three
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month
. I hope there are more
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that will go to my country Indonesia.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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