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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. BrVd
The line chart spectacles the number of enquiries received by the tourist information in one city over six month periods from January to Juny in 2011. First of all, lets us look the data arrange in the chart of the six month spans. In person, 450 inquires in January detected, and then the second month in February, the inquires individual grows up to 600 inquires. Go to the march, we can see the inquired continues rise to 800 inquires. Then in april, almost double levelled up to 1350 inquires. Next month in May, the inquires by human elevated again to 1550 inquires. And the last month in Juny, the inquires upgraded again to 1900 inquires. So, we can see that inquires by somebody was jumped over six months era. Next to the inquires by letter or email, in January, 750 inquired recognize. The next month in February, the inquires by online was degraded to 650 inquires. Go onto March, we can see that the inquires is decreased again to 630. In April, almost double dropped to 550 inquires. Change to the May, seen a declined again to 350 inquires. And the last month is Juny, the inquires noticed was no changes and still in 350 inquires. Spin to the inquires by telephone, In January, 900 inquiries catched, and next to the February, the inquires get down to 800. During march, the inquires by telephone grows again to 1000 inquires. Then in April, the inquires was stagnant in 1000 inquires. In may, almost double levelled up to 1400 inquires. The last month, we can see the inquires grows again to 1600.
The line chart spectacles the number of
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received by the tourist information in one city over six
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periods from January to
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Juny
in 2011.

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spans. In person, 450
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in January detected, and then the second
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in February, the
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individual grows up to 600
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. Go to the march, we can
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the inquired continues rise to 800
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. Then in
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april
, almost double levelled up to 1350
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.
Next
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in May, the
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by human elevated
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to 1550
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. And the last
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in
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Juny
, the
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upgraded
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to 1900
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that
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by letter or email, in
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inquired recognize. The
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in February, the
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by online
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to 650
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. Go onto March, we can
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is decreased
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to 630. In April, almost double dropped to 550
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.
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a declined
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to 350
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. And the last
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is
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, the
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in 350 inquires.

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by telephone, In
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, the
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by telephone grows
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to 1000
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. Then in April, the
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was stagnant in 1000
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. In
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, almost double levelled up to 1400
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, we can
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to 1600.
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