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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. 0kL5
Tourism in a city is important because it is one of the city’s biggest incomes. To maintain a stable tourism rate, the city government can improve the quality of tourism by provide support for tourist trips. Tourist information office will helps tourists to explore the city more by answering the tourist questions. Tourists can ask questions through several ways, such as in person, by letter or email, and by telephone. It will inadvertently increase tourists arrival to places which only local people know. The graph above illustrates the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over six-month period in 2011. The number of tourists who asked questions in person has increased quite drastically over six-month period. It also applied to the number of tourists who asked via telephone. Unfortunately, it was not applied to the number of tourist who asked via letter or email. It was probably because it was inefficient because by doing so, the tourist will get a slower response.
Tourism in a city is
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it is one of the city’s biggest incomes. To maintain a stable tourism rate, the city
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government
can
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improve
the quality of tourism by provide support for
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trips.
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information office will
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helps
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tourists
to explore the city more by answering the
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tourist
questions.
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can ask questions through several ways, such as in person, by letter or email, and by telephone. It will
inadvertently
increase
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tourists
arrival to places which
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only
local
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people
know.

The graph above illustrates the
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enquiries
received by the
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tourist
information office in one city over six-month period in 2011. The
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number
of
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tourists
who asked questions in person has increased quite
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over six-month period. It
also
applied to the
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number
of
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tourists
who asked via telephone. Unfortunately, it was not applied to the
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number
of
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tourist
who asked via letter or email. It was
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because
it was inefficient
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by doing
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, the
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tourist
will
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get
a slower response.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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