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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Barnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Barnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. rjWl
This line chart depicts How many books which were read by both genders at Burnaby Public Library during four years from 2011 to 2014. It is clear from the graph that the rate of reading books had increased during the period. Men read nearly 3000 books in 2011, which was much lower than women’s. The next year the rate increased gradually. But then, the number of books read by men increased dramatically during the last years. Accounting an incensement of six thousand books per year till it reached 16000 books in 2014. Women read two thousand books more than men in 2011. Then, for 2012 and 2013, the figure increased smoothly till the number was the same as for men’s. Surprisingly, the rate fall to 8000 in 2014 before it had reached 10000 the year before. To sum up, we could say that generally male read more books than female during the period of four years.
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till it reached 16000
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Women
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two thousand
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men
in 2011. Then, for 2012 and 2013, the figure
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than female during the period of four years.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Barnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

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