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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in six Gulf countries.

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in six Gulf countries. gedg
The provided bar graph compares the fertility rates of women in 6 different Gulf countries between 1990 and 2000. The fertility rate of those women was compared in two different years with a gap of 10 years - 1990 and 2000. As is evident in the bar graph, the fertility rates declined over the decade in all the countries and women in Oman and Saudi Arabia had higher fertility rates than the women in other four countries. In 1990, the fertility rate for each woman in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar and UAE was on an average between 3 to 4. However, this figures reduced to 2-3 by the year 2000. On the other hand, Omani and Saudi Arabian women had the highest fertility rates during both of the years. Oman had the largest number of childbirths per thousand woman, which was 7 in 1990 and just above 5 in 2000. Meanwhile, Saudi Arabia remained in the second position with relatively a higher fertility rate. It is quite obvious to notice that the fertility rate of women in all these Gulf countries reduced in 2000 than it was 10 years earlier. To summarise, even though there was a decrease in the women fertility rates, Oman and Saudi Arabian women continued to show a fairly higher fertility rate among the women in these 6 Gulf countries.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in six Gulf countries.

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