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the chart below shows the main reasons for study among students of different age group and the amount of they received from employers.

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The bar chart reveals the important factor for study among pupils for according to age group and the value of support they got from workers. Overall, yongsters select their study for choosing career and above fifties prefer to do job for interest. On the other side, freshers take maximum support from employers. As shown in the figure, 80% students which age is under 26 they select study for made career and only 10% students suggest study for interest. The proportion of choose for career is decrease stedily after 26 age. In contrast, the graph of study for interest is increase rapidaly after age of 26 while 70% of student doing their job for interest after age of 49. Morever, nearly same number of 40 - 49 year old people study for interest and career. On the other hand, the trainee emolpoyers need 60% support from their colleague which is high to all over graph. Afterward, the graph is gradually decrease at numbur of 30 - 39 age people and reached almost 33% then the graph rise stepely at 70% above age of 49.
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select their
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for choosing career and above fifties prefer to do job for
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. On the other side, freshers take maximum support from employers.

As shown in the figure, 80% students which
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is under 26 they select
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study
for made career and
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10% students suggest
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for
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interest
. The proportion of choose for career is decrease
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after 26
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for
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interest
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of 26 while 70% of student doing their job for
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after
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40 - 49
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, the trainee
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. Afterward, the
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is
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30 - 39
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and reached almost 33% then the
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