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The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in different countries.

The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in different countries. wBBa3
The bar chart competes the percentages of home activities between most younger students among four different countries. Overall, we can see that computer games and watching TV are marginally more highest one. However, completely different trends can be seen that the last two home activities (reading and board games) are the lowest at the specific figures for young children during four countries. The percentage of computer games of Nigeria which do considerable more than Malaysia and Sudan countries, around three-fifths and half among young children. According to this games fell markedly to two-fifths in China. Furthermore, the second highest number of home activity (watching TV) generally maintain middle position the period just 30 per cent in these countries. By contrast, the number of reading activity for young children declined as rapidly from 20 per cent to one in ten. Moreover, the last lowest home activity, board games hovered around a quarter and less than a third significantly, although these games which are rapidly remained more faster just over a quarter in Nigeria than next three countries.
The bar chart competes the percentages of home
activities
between
most younger
students among four
different
countries.

Overall
, we can
see
that computer
games
and watching TV are
marginally
more highest
one.
However
, completely
different
trends can be
seen
that the last two home
activities
(reading and board
games)
are the lowest at the specific figures for young children during four countries.

The percentage of computer
games
of Nigeria which do considerable more than Malaysia and Sudan countries, around three-fifths and half among young children. According to this
games
fell
markedly
to two-fifths in China.
Furthermore
, the second highest number of home
activity
(watching TV)
generally
maintain middle position the period
just
30 per cent in these countries.

By contrast, the number of reading
activity
for young children declined as
rapidly
from 20 per cent to one in ten.
Moreover
, the last lowest home
activity
, board
games
hovered around a quarter and less than a third
significantly
, although these
games
which are
rapidly
remained
more faster
just
over a quarter in Nigeria than
next
three countries.
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