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The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced.

The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. GMMwm

The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that this 5 stage man-made process is comprised of the filtering of raw water and addition of carbon dioxide in the early steps, mixing with additional ingredients in the middle, and finally packaging it off to be sold. In the beginning, raw water is cleaned by passing through a filter before water softener and chemicals are added. The clean water is then pumped into a heater and is eventually sent through a cooling pipe to the pivotal stage where carbon dioxide is introduced to create the carbonated effect. From there, the carbonated water is mixed with coloring, syrup, and flavors and filtered again prior to bottling and canning. The finished drinks are then boxed up and sent to supermarkets for retail.

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 the process by which carbonated drinks are produced
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