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The graph below shows the different goods sold by tech on shop center in Dubai, from 2009 to 2014

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The line chart provides information about the number of three sales items how sold in TechCom Shop Center in Dubai between 2009 to 2014. ln general, sales numbers in both laptops and iPhones decreased, while there was a significant increase in idads sales over a period of years. Looking in more detail, the graph illustrates that there was steep rise in the laptops sales, reaching a peak of just over 900 in 2013, before plummeting rapidly in the final. IPhones sales showed a similar trend. To be specific, from 2009 to 2011 the numbers remain steadily. There was then gradual fall from around 350 in 2012 to 200 in 2013. In contrast, between 2009 and 2013 the ipads sales fluctuated, before soared by just over 300 in 2014. One notable point is that in 2014 both laptops and ipads sales were the same
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numbers in both laptops and iPhones decreased, while there was a significant increase in
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idads
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over a period of years. Looking in more detail, the graph illustrates that there was steep rise in the laptops
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, reaching a peak of
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over 900 in 2013,
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in the final.
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IPhones
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a similar trend. To be specific, from 2009 to 2011 the numbers remain
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. There was then gradual fall from around 350 in 2012 to 200 in 2013.
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, between 2009 and 2013 the
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ipads
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fluctuated,
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over 300 in 2014. One notable point is that in 2014 both laptops and
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the different goods sold by tech on shop center in Dubai, from 2009 to 2014

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