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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. v.3

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. v. 3
The line graph illustrates changes in wheat export by Australia, Canada, and the European Community within a five-year period - from 1985 to 1990. Overall, what stands out of the graph is that wheat export by the European Community increased over the period, whereas Australia witnessed a gradual decrease in the period considered. Although wheat exports of the three areas fluctuated, Canada had the highest oscillations throughout the interim. One of the first things to note is that Canada was the country whose wheat exportation comprised nearly 20 million tons in 1985. In the following year, the rate of export fell and then quickly recovered reaching a peak of 25 million tons in 1988. However, this figure fluctuated over the years, finishing surprisingly the same as it was at the starting point. European Community initially exported less than Canada, but its outcome turned out more than the other two countries at the final point- over 20 tons. In contrast to the other two areas, Australia exported 15 tons in 1985 and saw a slight decrease over the period except in 1986.
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by Australia, Canada, and the European Community within a five-year
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from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
, what stands out of the graph is that
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wheat
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export
by the European Community increased
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over
the
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period
, whereas Australia witnessed a gradual decrease in the
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considered. Although
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wheat
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exports
of the three areas fluctuated, Canada had the highest oscillations throughout the interim.

One of the
first
things to note is that Canada was the country whose
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wheat
exportation comprised
nearly
20 million tons in 1985. In the following year, the rate of
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export
fell and then
quickly
recovered reaching a peak of 25 million tons in 1988.
However
, this figure fluctuated
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over
the years, finishing
surprisingly
the same as it was at the starting point.

European Community
initially
exported less than Canada,
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its outcome turned out more than the other two countries at the final point-
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over
20 tons.
In contrast
to the other two areas, Australia exported 15 tons in 1985 and
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saw
a slight decrease
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over
the
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period
except in 1986.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. v. 3

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6.5
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