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the graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical day in summer and winter. The pie chart shows how how electricity is used in an average English home. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical day in summer and winter. The pie chart shows how how electricity is used in an average English home. m1Ll8
The Graph below indicates the different demand for electricity in both summer and winter. In addition, the pie chart shows the various usage of electricity. It is obvious that typical daily demand in winter is totally higher than summer and that is rational. People of England clearly have demanded the electricity two levels higher in winter at different hours of the day. The pick of the graph is at 21 at night and the lowest number is between 6 to 9 in the morning. It is almost the same in the summer. In the middle of the day the usage is stable with no considerable change. The pie chart shows that the most usage of electricity is for heating issues, Especially it can be more happen in winter, about 52. 5% of all, it means that the half of the usage is dedicated to heating. Kitchen electronic staff are the next high number of usage, about 17. 5%. Other systems are nearly the same. Things like TVs, radios and food mixers are in the same level. As a result, in winter there is an extreme demand for electricity and at nights as well. Kitchen electronic systems use more electricity thus, the first level of usage is placed here.
The Graph below indicates the
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two levels higher in
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at
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hours of the day. The pick of the graph is at 21 at night and the lowest number is
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in the morning. It is almost the same in the summer. In the middle of the day the
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is stable with no considerable
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The pie chart
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that the most
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of
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is for heating issues,
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, about 52. 5% of all, it means that the half of the
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usage
is dedicated
to heating. Kitchen electronic staff are the
next
high number of
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, about 17. 5%. Other systems are
nearly
the same. Things like TVs, radios and food mixers are in the same level.

As a result
, in
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winter
there is an extreme demand for
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and at nights
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. Kitchen electronic systems
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thus
, the
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IELTS academic the graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical day in summer and winter. The pie chart shows how how electricity is used in an average English home.

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