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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kind of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kind of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 odmB
The line graph illustrates the consumption of non-vegitable meals such as fish, lamb, beef and chicken, who eaten by a European people from 1979 to 2004. Overall, it can be seen that, in 1979, the consumption of beef was higher as compare to fish and which was least amount ate by per person, however consumption of chicken was increased during the period and that was highest quantity consumed by each in 2004. In 1979, the chicken was third highest position which consumed 150 grams per capita per week afterward that soar to approximately 250 grams in the year of 2004. To contrast, the consumption of beef and lamb had 220 grams and 150 grams respectively in 1979. Both the meals trend was decline throughout the period while it reached to beef at nearly 100 grams as well as lamb at 70 grams weekly per head. Moreover, the consumption of fish was just over 50 grams per individual in 1979 and then consumption of fish was level off but slightly decreasing trend during the period and that reached to just under the 50 grams per capita per week since 2004.
The line graph illustrates the
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non-vegitable
meals such as fish, lamb,
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beef
and chicken, who eaten by a European
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people
from 1979 to 2004.

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that, in 1979, the
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was higher
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compare to fish and which was
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amount ate by per person,
however
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consumption
of chicken
was increased
during the period and that was
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highest
quantity consumed by each in 2004.

In 1979, the chicken was third highest position which consumed 150
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grams
per capita per week afterward that soar to approximately 250
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grams
in the year of 2004. To contrast, the
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of
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beef
and lamb had 220
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grams
and 150
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grams
respectively
in 1979. Both the meals trend was decline throughout the period while it reached to
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beef
at
nearly
100
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grams
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as well as
lamb at 70
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grams
weekly per head.

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, the
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of fish was
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over 50
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grams
per individual in 1979 and then
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of fish was level off
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but
slightly
decreasing trend during the period and that reached to
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under the 50
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grams
per capita per week since 2004.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kind of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

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