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The diagram below shows the process of distilling salty water into fresh water.

The diagram below shows the process of distilling salty water into fresh water. RdpV

the diagram depicts the information about the procedure of converting salty water to freshwater. to begin with, it can be clearly seen that the metal funnel is attached on the top of the pot, which is connected that salty water is heated then it starts converting into steam which Is passing though funnel to the pipe. Moving further, it has noticed that on the lengthy pipe a piece of cloth is placewhen stem go through pipe then water from jug i poured on cloth, which hep the stem convert into water is collected intbucket. in overall, in this process every stage is imarative if the one is missing then hault the whole process.

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the
 diagram depicts the information about the procedure of converting salty You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 to freshwater.

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to
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begin
 with, it can be clearly
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seen
 that the metal funnel is attached
 on the top of the pot, which is connected
 that salty You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is heated
 then it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
 converting into steam which Is passing though funnel to the pipe.

Moving further
, it has noticed that on the lengthy pipe a piece of cloth is Possible spelling mistake found.place when
placewhen
 stem go through pipe then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 from jug Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 poured on cloth, which Did you mean "help" or "hip" ("hep" is old-fashioned for "hip")?helphip
hep
 the stem convert into You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is collected
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intbucket
.

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in
overall
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 the whole process. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process of distilling salty water into fresh water.

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

113 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

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