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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. AVy3
The given line graph illustrates the ingestion of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European state from 1974 to 2004. Overall, according to the graph, during a certain period of time, the most consumed type of meat was chicken, rate of which had gradually risen over the period, while the indicators of fish, lamb and beef, on the contrary declined. As can be seen from the graph, in 1979 the proportion of beef meat was about 220 grams per person, and at that time it was the highest result. Moreover, the second most devoured sort of flesh was lamb, the figure of that product was respectively 150 grams per human, exceeding the charge of chicken by 10 grams. In addition, at the beginning of the interval, the rate of fish consumption was about 60 grams per individual person. By 2004, the figures of all kinds of meat have changed and the substitutes at that time were significant. To be more exact, the rates of beef and lamb had moderately dropped, while indicator of chicken had steadily climbed and showed a result with about 250 grams per person. In constant, the index of fish ingestion also had minimally reduced by about 20 grams
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line graph illustrates the ingestion of fish and
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some
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different
kinds of
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meat
in a European state from 1974 to 2004.

Overall
, according to the graph, during a certain period of time, the most consumed type of
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meat
was chicken, rate of which had
gradually
risen over the period, while the indicators of fish, lamb and beef,
on the contrary
declined.

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seen
from the graph, in 1979 the proportion of beef
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meat
was about 220
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grams
per person, and at that time it was the highest result.
Moreover
, the second most devoured sort of flesh was lamb, the figure of that product was
respectively
150
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grams
per human, exceeding the charge of chicken by 10
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grams
.
In addition
, at the beginning of the interval, the rate of fish consumption was about 60
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grams
per individual person.

By 2004, the figures of all kinds of
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meat
have
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changed
and the substitutes at that time were significant. To be more exact, the rates of beef and lamb had
moderately
dropped, while indicator of chicken had
steadily
climbed and
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showed
a result with about 250
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grams
per person. In constant, the index of fish ingestion
also
had
minimally
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reduced
by about 20
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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