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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufactures to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufactures to produce vehicles at their US factories. 7J6J2
The line graph depicts how much time was consumed to manufacture vehicles in the US by four various brands( General motor, Ford, Toyota, Honda) from 1998 to 2005. Overall, it is apparently observed that there was a moderate downward trend in the amount of time spent on assembling by all brands. Apart from General Motor, the time production of the others fluctuated slightly during the period. In 1998, Gmotor accounted for the longest time to create the car, at 32 hours, compared to 28 hours of Ford. The hours per vehicle utilized by Toyota and Honda were relatively equal, at 22 hours For the rest of the period, Gmotor reduced the average time to manufacture car, just below 22 hours in 2005. By contrast, Ford increased time to nearly 32 hours to produce car then decreased to roughly 21 hours in the year 2005. In terms of Toyota and Honda, the figures fluctuated over the period and levelled off at 20 hours per vehicle.
The line graph depicts how much
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to manufacture vehicles in the US by four various brands
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General motor, Ford, Toyota, Honda) from 1998 to 2005.

Overall
, it is
apparently
observed that there was a moderate downward trend in the amount of
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spent on assembling by all brands. Apart from General Motor, the
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production of the others fluctuated
slightly
during the period.

In 1998,
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accounted for the longest
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to create the car, at 32
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, compared to 28
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of Ford. The
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hours
per vehicle utilized by Toyota and Honda were
relatively
equal, at 22 hours

For the rest of the period,
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to manufacture car,
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below 22
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in 2005. By contrast, Ford increased
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to
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32
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to produce car then decreased to roughly 21
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in the year 2005. In terms of Toyota and Honda, the figures fluctuated over the period and levelled off at 20
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per vehicle.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufactures to produce vehicles at their US factories.

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