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The following bar charts illustrate information about two kinds of Tv proframmes, which are watched by Australian men and women in different age groups

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The following bar charts illustrate information about two kinds of Tv proframmes, which are watched by Australian men and women in different age gropus. Overall, the female average, watched realities, overtake male’s proportion watching this kind of show. Contrary to game shows, that men outnumber women figures. Most of the people, who love spending their hours watching TV, aged 45 or more. Firstly, almost 70% of women watches reality shows, which is almost double than men’s rate to 35%. On the other hand, in sport shows the proportion of men was only 2% more than female’s percentage. The rates of Australians watching realities increases steadily from 16 to 45 years old. The smallest average of viewers was nearly 50% in ages between 16 and 24. The amounts were risen approximately to 70% in people, whose age is45 and more. As for game shows, there are fluctuations in viewers percentage. In spite the 50% of young people (16-24) love game shows, the numbers were dropped remarkably in older age group of people, aged 25-34 to 40%. The proportion was grown slightly in group of 35-44 years old by 3%. The average was gone up dramatically to almost 70% for viewers over the 45 years old.
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outnumber women figures. Most of the
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spending their hours watching TV, aged 45 or more.

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, almost 70% of women
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reality
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the proportion of
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2% more than female’s percentage.

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. The smallest average of viewers was
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by 3%. The average
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IELTS academic The following bar charts illustrate information about two kinds of Tv proframmes, which are watched by Australian men and women in different age groups

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