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The chart below shows the film's participation in Australia and also shows the typical film trips of different age groups from 1996 to 2000. Take a look at the data and select and announce key highlights, where important.

The chart below shows the film's participation in Australia and also shows the typical film trips of different age groups from 1996 to 2000. Take a look at the data and select and announce key highlights, where important. bb72X
The table gives detailed information about the proportion of cinema visitors, the average times they came there while the line graph reveals the cinema coming frequency in terms of age groups from 1996 to 2000. Overall, over the surveyed years, cinema attracted more customers during the surveyed years while their visiting frequency seems to decrease at the end. Moreover, the young enjoy this service more than the older groups A first look at the table shows that citizens' attendance witnessed a growth during the surveyed years. Cinema comer was accounted for 62% of the population in 1996 and 72% in both 1997 and 1998, then it decreased slightly to 70% in 1999 before it rise back to 72% again in the last examined year. There is a fluctuation in the number of visiting of as in 1996, a customer averagely come to the cinema 10. 3 times, peaked in 11. 1 times in 1997 then stood at 8. 3 times in 2000. the 14-24 ages watched the film at the cinema most likely than the other group since it started at 15 times in 1996 then went up at 1997 and 1999 (around 22 times) and went down to 17 times in 2000. Other age groups share the same pattern of fluctuation but their figures also ranges from above 10 to just under 15.
The table gives detailed information about the proportion of
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cinema
visitors, the average
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times
they came there while the line graph reveals the
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cinema
coming frequency in terms of age groups from 1996 to 2000.

Overall
, over the surveyed years,
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cinema
attracted more customers during the surveyed years while their visiting frequency seems to decrease at the
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end
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, the young enjoy this service more than the older groups

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first
look at the table
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that citizens' attendance witnessed a growth during the surveyed years.
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Cinema
comer
was accounted
for 62% of the population in 1996 and 72% in both 1997 and 1998, then it decreased
slightly
to 70% in 1999
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before
it rise back to 72% again in the last examined
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year
. There is a fluctuation in the number of visiting of as in 1996, a customer
averagely
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come
to the
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cinema
10. 3
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times
, peaked in 11. 1
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times
in 1997 then stood at 8. 3
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times
in 2000.

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the
14-24 ages
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watched
the film at the
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cinema
most
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than the other group since it
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started
at 15
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times
in 1996 then went up at 1997 and 1999 (around 22
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times)
and went down to 17
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in 2000. Other age groups share the same pattern of fluctuation
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their figures
also
ranges from above 10 to
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just
under 15.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the film's participation in Australia and also shows the typical film trips of different age groups from 1996 to 2000. Take a look at the data and select and announce key highlights, where important.

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