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The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age groups.

The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age groups. Gl6Do
The line graph provides information regarding the number of films watched in a cinema by three various age groups between 2000 and 2015. Overall, people with ages 18-24 had an upward trend which meant they had watched more movies over the years. In contrary, people with age of 25-44 years old and 45-65 years old shared the same downward trend about the numbers of movies watched. According to the information given, ages 18-24 watched 10 movies in 2000 and seen a total of 12 movies in 2005 which remained steady until 2010. In 2015, they reached the highest number of films watched in the theater with a total number of 14. In contrast, the two age groups (25-44 and 45-65) had a decline in the number of movies watched all throughout the years. In 2000, people at age 25-44 started with 12 movies then decreased dramatically until 2015 with its lowest point with 5 movies seen. In comparison, 45-65 years old began with 15 movies then gradually lessened the number of movies seen over the years with only 8 films watched in 2015.
The line graph provides information regarding the
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of films
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watched
in a cinema by three various
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age
groups between 2000 and 2015.

Overall
,
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people
with
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ages
18-24 had an upward trend which meant they had
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watched
more
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movies
over the years. In contrary,
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with
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age
of 25-44 years
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old
and 45-65 years
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old
shared the same downward trend about the
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numbers
of
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movies
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watched
.

According to the information
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given
,
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ages
18-24
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watched
10
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movies
in 2000 and
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seen
a total of 12
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movies
in 2005 which remained steady until 2010. In 2015, they reached the highest
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number
of films
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watched
in the theater with a total
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number
of 14.

In contrast
, the two
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age
groups (25-44 and 45-65) had a decline in the
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number
of
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movies
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watched
all throughout the years.
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In
2000,
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people
at
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age
25-44
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started
with 12
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movies
then decreased
dramatically
until 2015 with its lowest point with 5
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movies
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seen
.
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In
comparison, 45-65 years
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old
began with 15
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movies
then
gradually
lessened the
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number
of
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movies
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seen
over the years with
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only
8 films
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watched
in 2015.
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