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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Vista Cafe, by season.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Vista Cafe, by season. lOxb
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of selected food sales per day at Vista Café by season. Overall, it is clear that the percentage of hot coffee is the most popular in winter season, while the trend of iced coffee sells more than others in summer season. To begin with, hot coffee is the most popular than other in term of food item, accounting for approximately three quarters in winter season but this trend is consumed only 30% in summer season. Regarding to iced coffee consumption, smallest percentage of people drink iced coffee in winter although it is the most popular food item in summer, amounting to 40 respectively. Consumption of soup is as popular as Salad in summer, equaling to 1 in four respectively but in winter that of soup is more famous between ice cream and salad, accounting for 50 in soup and about 25 in Salad and Ice Cream.
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of selected food sales per day at Vista Café by season.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the percentage of hot
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coffee
is the most
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popular
in
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winter
season, while the trend of iced
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coffee
sells more than others in
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summer
season.

To
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begin
with, hot
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coffee
is the most
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popular
than other in term of food item, accounting for approximately three quarters in
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winter
season
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but
this trend
is consumed
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only
30% in
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summer
season.
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Regarding to
iced
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coffee
consumption,
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smallest
percentage of
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people
drink iced
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coffee
in
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winter
although it is the most
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popular
food item in
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summer
, amounting to 40
respectively
.

Consumption of soup is as
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popular
as Salad in
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summer
, equaling to 1 in four
respectively
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but
in
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winter
that of soup is more
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famous
between ice cream and salad, accounting for 50 in soup and about 25 in Salad and Ice Cream.
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