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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. VD6D
The bar chart compares the ten different countries production and consumtion of electricity in the year 2014. Production and consumption are measured in billion kwh. Overall, It is clear that, China was the leading country for both production and consumption of electricity. While the least significiant country in terms of electricity production and consumption was the Korea Rep. Looking into more details, in China electricity production and consumption rate are almost identical, as 5398 billion kwh and 5322 bilion kwh. Furthermore, the production rate in USA in higher than the consumption rate both were 4009 and 3866 billion respectively and this was the sccond highest rate among the other nation. In Russia and Korea Rep had the alomst identical rate for those, that was 1057 and 1038 kwh in Russia and 485. 1 and 449. 5 kwh in Korea. IN Japan and India, the production rate was much higher than the consumption rate. India produced almost 73 billion kwh more and Japan consumed approximately 80 billion kwh less than that they produced. In contrast Germany had higher consumotion rate than the production rate, it was almost 56 billion kwh.
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, in China electricity
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