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The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five-year period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five-year period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below MmmMa
The graph below demonstrates the amount of money spent on different forms of entertainment over a five-year period from 1995-2000 To begin with, the common feature of the entire graph is that each region (Asia, Europe, and the United States) has seen a significant climb in numbers between the time period. Additionally, the United States has the largest differential in statistics of the three regions, with an increase of 73 billion dollars. However, Europe has witnessed a growth of a lesser degree than both Asia and the United States. Despite having a higher total of money spent on entertainment, Europe has only made a 34 billion dollar increase. On the contrary, Asia has seen a greater gap of 43 billion dollars. Accountable for these heightened numbers is mainly because of publishing and television. Each makes up for approximately three quarters of the total rise, while cinema, video, and music make up for the remainder of the said total.
The graph below demonstrates the amount of money spent on
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forms of entertainment over a five-year period from 1995-2000

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with, the common feature of the entire graph is that each region (Asia, Europe, and the United States) has
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a significant climb in numbers between the time period.
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, the United States has the largest differential in statistics of the three regions, with an increase of 73 billion dollars.
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, Europe has witnessed a growth of a lesser degree than both Asia and the United States. Despite having a higher total of money spent on entertainment, Europe has
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made a 34 billion dollar increase.
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a greater gap of 43 billion dollars. Accountable for these heightened numbers is
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of publishing and television.
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up for approximately three quarters of the total rise, while cinema, video, and music
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up for the remainder of the said total.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five-year period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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