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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The bar graph illustrates, montary cost spent on various entertainments during 1995 to 2000 in Asia, Europe, United States. It includes entertainments namely, cinema, video, music, publishing and television. In Asia, for the year 1995 the maximum money is spend on publishing. Whereas, in 2000 the highest is spend on television. In both the years least is spend on cinema. In Europe, for both the years higher amount is spend on television. On the other hand, minimum is spend on video for 1995 and on cinema for 2000. In United States, the highest money spend is for publishing. And the least is spend amount is spend on cinema in 1995 and for 2000 cinema and video were equal. The money spend on other entertainment modes were similar to each other during 5 years for Asia, Europe and United States. Therefore, in United States the money spent on entertainment is higher. On the contrary, Asia spends the lowest on entertainment. A drastic change in spending money is noticed from 1995 to 2000 in these three continents. Hence people strated spending more in 2000.

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