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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

As it shows in the line graph the statistics on elderly people's leisure time behaviors in the United States over the twenty year period from 1980 to 2010. Overall an upward drift has been experienced in perusing, climbing, observing TV and browsing the web, whereas the theater shows a descending drift. As the given chart shows, from 20 percent within the 1980s to over 80 percent within the 2010s, there was a gigantic rise with no change in climbing Between the 1980s and 2000s, both observing TV and browsing the web relentlessly expanded, on the opposite web surfing began to rise significantly from 15 percent within the 2000s to over 50 percent within the 2010s, compared with the decrease in observing TV in this period. Compared to the planning theater, which experienced a exceptional diminish by 20 percent, the percentage of perusing relentlessly expanded from 1980 to 1990. Attending to the theater increased back within the 1990s, cresting at over 45% within the 2010s whereas perusing quickly declined to 20% within the 2000s some time recently hitting 60% within the 2010s.

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