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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in seniormanagement in three companies between 1975 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the percentage of women in senior management positions in different companies from 1975 to 2015 year. Overall, the number of females in all companies was finally increased through the past 40 years. While Eldan Ltd and Bamforth Ltd experienced steadily increasement, Finsbury Ltd’s percentage value had some fluctuations throughout the entire period. As noticed earlier the number of women in the first two companies has been increasing. Since 1975 where Eldan Ltd had only 3% and Bamforth Ltd had about 9%, with an increase every 5 years of small margin up to 2015 of which 64% and 46%. Turning to Finsbury Ltd, there was inclines and declines every 5 years. From 1975 year where the percentage was 16% to 1980 year with 14% of women and to 15% in 1985 year. In 1990 the number suddenly increased up to 22% and finally dramatically increased to 26% in 2015 year from 20% in 2000 year.

The table illustrates the percentage of women in senior management positions in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
 from 1975 to 2015 year.

Overall
, the number of females in all This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
 was finally
 increased through the past 40 years. While Possible spelling mistake found.EldonAldanElanÉlan
Eldan
 Ltd and Possible spelling mistake found.Tamworth
Bamforth
 Ltd experienced steadily
Possible spelling mistake found.incrementencasement
increasement
, Possible spelling mistake found.Fins bury
Finsbury
 Ltd’s percentage value had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 fluctuations throughout the entire period.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 noticed earlier the number of women in the first
 two This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
 has been increasing. Since 1975 where Possible spelling mistake found.EldonAldanElanÉlan
Eldan
 Ltd had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 3% and Possible spelling mistake found.Tamworth
Bamforth
 Ltd had about 9%, with an increase every 5 years of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 margin up to 2015 of which 64% and 46%.

Turning to Possible spelling mistake found.Fins bury
Finsbury
 Ltd, Did you mean "there were inclines"?there were inclines
there was inclines
 and declines every 5 years. From 1975 It is better to use 'year' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "year when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')year when
year where
 the percentage was 16% to 1980 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 with 14% of women and to 15% in 1985 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
. In 1990 the number suddenly
 increased up to 22% and finally
dramatically
 increased to 26% in 2015 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 from 20% in 2000 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
. 