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the chart below shows the number of travellers from Japan travelling abroad between 1985 to 1995 nd Australia's share market

The bar chart illustrates the number of tourists from Japan visiting abroad in 10 years between 1985 and 1995 and line graph explains the shares of Australia by Japanese visitor's sector. Overall, people were interested in travelling from the beginning and increased in numbers every single year till 1991 as there was a reduction of visitors by few numbers. The units are measured in millions. Apart from that It is clear that Australian share market was rising sharply and experienced a downhill in 1989 and figures are shown in percentage. In terms of the travellers visiting overseas destinations, nearly 5 million people visited other countries in 1985 which was increasing sharply till 1990 and quantity declined in 1991 and set at around 11 million. However, it took a slight upsurge from next year and kept on increasing till 1995 and reach at the peak point by 15 million people. On the other hand, Australian tourist sector was at 2 percent in 1985 which hiked to 5 percent in 1988. Although it percentage declined in 1989 but continue with sharp increment and was above 6 percent in 1993.
The bar chart illustrates the number of tourists from Japan visiting abroad in 10 years between 1985 and 1995 and line graph
explains
the shares of Australia by Japanese visitor's sector.

Overall
,
people
were interested
in travelling from the beginning and increased in numbers every single year till 1991 as there was a reduction of visitors by few numbers. The units
are measured
in
millions
. Apart from that It is
clear
that Australian share market was rising
sharply
and experienced a downhill in 1989 and figures
are shown
in percentage.

In terms of the
travellers
visiting overseas destinations,
nearly
5
million
people
visited other countries in 1985 which was increasing
sharply
till 1990 and quantity declined in 1991 and set at around 11
million
.
However
, it took a slight upsurge from
next
year and
kept
on increasing till 1995 and reach at the peak point by 15
million
people
.

On the other hand
, Australian tourist sector was at 2 percent in 1985 which hiked to 5 percent in 1988. Although
it
percentage declined in 1989
but
continue with sharp increment and was above 6 percent in 1993.
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IELTS academic the chart below shows the number of travellers from Japan travelling abroad between 1985 to 1995 nd Australia's share market

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