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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. 83ak
The data illustrates the trend of the average of carbon dioxide(CO2) emissions in metric tonnes per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. The graph showed that at the beginning of the period, the amount of CO2 emissions in each country had started within the wide range of 1 to 11 metric tonnes. However, in 2007 the gap between the lowest to highest became less within the range of 5 to 9 approximately. The highest(11 metric tonnes) and second-highest(9 metric tonnes) amount of CO2 took place by the United Kingdom and Sweden respectively. Although Sweden had a peak in 1977, which nearly reached the amount of United Kingdom at 11 metric tonnes, both countries’ emission has a downward trend. On the other hand, the emissions amount of the two countries, which started at the lower amount, Sweden and Portugal recorded around 4 and 1 respectively in 1967, ended up increased over the period. The trend of their bar graphs seems similar in their inclining pattern, which is negatively correlated with the trend of the UK. Overall, it can be seen that, between 1997 to 2007, Italy and were able to slow down CO2 emissions, while UK and Sweden were successfully reduced. In fact, UK still remained with the highest CO2 emissions, Sweden reduced their CO2 emission most drastically.
The data illustrates the trend of the average of carbon dioxide(CO2)
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emissions
in metric tonnes per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. The graph
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showed
that at the beginning of the period, the
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amount
of CO2
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emissions
in each country had
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started
within the wide range of 1 to 11 metric tonnes.
However
, in 2007 the gap between the lowest to highest became less within the range of 5 to 9 approximately.

The highest(11 metric tonnes) and second-highest(9 metric tonnes)
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amount
of CO2 took place by the United Kingdom and Sweden
respectively
. Although Sweden had a peak in 1977, which
nearly
reached the
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amount
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of United Kingdom
at 11 metric tonnes, both countries’
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emission
has a downward trend.

On the other hand
, the
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emissions
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amount
of the two countries, which
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started
at the lower
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amount
, Sweden and Portugal recorded around 4 and 1
respectively
in 1967, ended up increased over the period. The trend of their bar graphs seems similar in their inclining pattern, which is
negatively
correlated with the trend of the UK.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that,
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between 1997 to 2007
, Italy and were able to slow down CO2
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emissions
, while UK and Sweden were
successfully
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reduced
. In fact, UK
still
remained with the highest CO2
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emissions
, Sweden
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reduced
their CO2
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emission
most
drastically
.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

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