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The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions od Dirham

The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions od Dirham eaKx
The line graph illustrates the total expenditure in millions of Dirham spend on gold in Dubai between the months of January and December in year 2002. As can be seen according to the diagram the maximum sales of gold took place in month of March and waa lowest in months of July and September. It is apparently seen that, initially in January 2002, two hundred millions of Dirham gold was sold and this amount kept on increasing for the next two months and in March it hit an apex of 350 million which was the highest in whole year. After that the sales volume keep decreasing 100 million per month and waa lowest in month of July hitting just over 100 million. With some osscilations, the sale amount reached to 200 million in August, again was lowest in September ans after some marginal growth it remained unchanged for the last three months with sales of approximately 200 millions of Dirham.
The line graph illustrates the total expenditure in
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spend on gold in Dubai between the
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of January and December in year 2002. As can be
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according to the diagram the maximum
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of gold took place in
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of March and
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lowest in
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of July and September. It is
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that,
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Dirham
gold
was sold
and this amount
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kept
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two
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and in March it hit an apex of 350
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which was the highest in whole year. After that the
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volume
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lowest in
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of July hitting
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over 100
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osscilations
, the
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amount reached to 200
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in August, again was lowest in September ans after
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marginal growth it remained unchanged for the last three
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IELTS academic The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions od Dirham

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