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The Graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the U nited Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the U nited Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. 8nml
In this globe era, where people fond of travelling, It is commonly believe that only those who aspire to travel, work or study abroad learn foreign language; while, many argue that there are more various reasons why people nowadays teaching foreign languages. In my opinion, apart from aforementioned 3 purpose, there are many different areas where globe language can be beneficial to every individual. On the one hand, many people believe that learning foreign language is worthless, because they think that it is only benefit to those who aspire to go overseas for any kind of purpose. Since they are not conscious about other advantageous feature of globe tongue, so they do not even desire to learn this even for their day-to-day usage. For instance, those individuals who are living in to village in India, globe language is not very helpful to those specially old people. On the other hand, there are uncountable advantages and reasons why to every mankind are aspire to learn globe language. Firstly, there are lot of tourist places where many foreign tourist are visiting, thus, locals are learning second tongue predominantly to run their business. Secondly, there are many companies who started investing on other countries where they find man power a bit cheaper than their own country, therefore, learning foreign language is the key to get hired in those companies. Finally, there are a lot of benefits in day-to-day life for every being. To illustrate, there are lot of information available on the internet to read or to learn anything new, but most of them are in foreign language. So, undoubtedly there are various cause to learn second language. To conclude, however, learning foreign language for immigration purpose is must, but there are plenty of other reasons because of which people are educating themselves foreign language.
In this
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era, where
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people
fond of travelling, It is
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those
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language
; while,
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argue that there are more various reasons why
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nowadays teaching
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languages
. In my opinion, apart from aforementioned 3 purpose, there are
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many
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different
areas where
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language
can be beneficial to every individual.

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many
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people
believe that
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foreign
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language
is worthless,
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they
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think
that it is
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only
benefit to those
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who
aspire to go overseas for any kind of purpose. Since they are not conscious about
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other
advantageous feature of
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globe
tongue,
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they do not even desire to
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learn
this even for their day-to-day usage.
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, those individuals
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who
are living in to village in India,
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globe
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language
is not
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very
helpful to those
specially
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old
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people
.

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hand, there are uncountable advantages and reasons why to every mankind are
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to
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learn
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globe
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language
.
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, there are
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lot of
tourist places where
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many
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foreign
tourist are visiting,
thus
, locals are
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learning
second tongue
predominantly
to run their business.
Secondly
, there are
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many
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companies
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who
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started
investing on
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other
countries where they find
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man
power a bit cheaper than their
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own
country,
therefore
,
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learning
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foreign
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language
is the key to
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get
hired in those
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companies
.
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a lot of
benefits in day-to-day life for every being. To illustrate, there are
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lot of
information available on the internet to read or to
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anything new,
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most of them are in
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foreign
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language
.
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So
,
undoubtedly
there are various cause to
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learn
second language.

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,
however
,
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learning
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foreign
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language
for immigration purpose is
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must
,
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but
there are
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other
reasons
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of which
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people
are educating themselves
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.
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IELTS academic The Graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the U nited Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

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