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the graph below show the different kinds of emission sources(oil, coal, gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK between 1990 to 2010

the graph below show the different kinds of emission sources(oil, coal, gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK between 1990 to 2010 bEDxg
The bar chart provide the information about proportion of carbon emission from three different sources namely gas, oil and coal in the London in the period of 1990 to 2010. Overall, it can be noticed from the graph that car emission from gas experienced the upward trend throughout the period; whereas, coal showed down trend in the emission of carbon. On the other hand, oil followed fluctuating trend during the starting to end. Analyzing the data, nearly above 300 million tons of carbon is emitted to atmosphere from the burning of coal, which was highest among three sources in 1990, and also being higher than rest of other sources. Then, the figure showed a gradual decrease to about 260 million tons in 1995, and it continued to drop steadily to the end of the period, reaching around 250 and 235 million of tons in 2000 and 2005, and hitting the low-point of about 190 million tons in 2010; whereas, exactly opposite trend has been observed for carbon emission for gas from beginning to the end and it superseded the carbon emission’s rate from coal at the end. Carbon produced from the oil was approximately 260 million tons in 1990, and then this rate was declined slightly by nearly 20 million tons in 1995. Five years later, this rate escalated to about 255 million tons. However, this rate was experienced gradual decline in both 2005 and 2010 by reaching 240 and 190 million tons respectively.
The bar chart provide the information about proportion of
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gas, oil and coal in the London in the period of 1990 to 2010.

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emission
from gas experienced the upward
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trend
throughout the period; whereas, coal
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showed
down
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trend
in the
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emission
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carbon
.
On the other hand
, oil followed fluctuating
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trend
during the starting to
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end
.

Analyzing the data,
nearly
above 300
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million
tons of
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carbon
is emitted
to atmosphere from the burning of coal, which was highest among three sources in 1990, and
also
being higher than rest of other sources. Then, the figure
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showed
a gradual decrease to about 260
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million
tons in 1995, and it continued to drop
steadily
to the
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end
of the period, reaching around 250 and 235
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million
of tons in 2000 and 2005, and hitting the low-point of about 190
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million
tons in 2010; whereas, exactly opposite
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trend
has
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carbon
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emission
for gas from beginning to the
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end
and it superseded the
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carbon
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emission’s
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rate
from coal at the
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end
.

Carbon produced from the oil was approximately 260
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million
tons in 1990, and then this
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rate
was declined
slightly
by
nearly
20
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tons in 1995. Five years later, this
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rate
escalated to about 255
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However
, this
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rate
was experienced
gradual decline in both 2005 and 2010 by reaching 240 and 190
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million
tons
respectively
.

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