Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown. pAmw
The growth started at two percent in 1993, but it didn’t stay there very long before it rapidly doubled in 1994. Further on, the percentages declines to three percent in 1995, stayed steady for a year, before starting to rise slowly and ending up just under four percent in 1997. 1998 was the best year where the wages growth peaked at six percent. However, after 1998 the wages grew less and less nearly every year. Only a year after, the percentage dropped to well under three percent, and stayed there on roughly three percent till 2000. In 2002 the wages reached the lowest point of just one percent growth. Luckily the growth rose in 2003 at junst under two percent. Overall, the growth rate in wages in Somecountry has shown striking changes through the ten years.
The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
at two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1993,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it didn’t stay there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
long
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it
rapidly
doubled in 1994.
Further
on, the percentages declines to three
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1995, stayed steady for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
starting to rise
slowly
and ending up
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
under four
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1997. 1998 was the best
It is better to use 'year' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "year when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')
year where
the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "wages'" or "wage's"?
wages
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
peaked at six percent.

However
, after 1998 the wages grew less and less
nearly
every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
after, the percentage dropped to well under three
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
, and stayed there on roughly three
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
till 2000. In 2002 the wages reached the lowest point of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
. Luckily the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
rose in 2003 at
Possible spelling mistake found.
junst
under two percent.

Overall
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
rate in wages in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Somecountry
has shown striking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
through the ten years.

IELTS academic The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
136 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.