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The graph below gives information form a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information form a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. 0AMe1
The graph illustrate detail information report generated in the year 2008 and includes energy consumption in America in the period from 1980 to 2030. In the graph total six types of energy sources considered to console data. Petrol and Oil are the biggest contributor whereas Nuclear, solar or wing energy and hydropower are the least contributor in 2030. At the beginning, Nuclear, solar and hydropower started with equal quadrillion units up to 5. Hydropower cloud not do much better in era where as in comparison, nuclear power consumption have been showing slightly growth in consumption. Wing and solar power predicted to reached maximum 5 quadrillion units from 2010 to the end of the period. Coal and natural gases gave 15 to 20 units consumption earlier then at the end, natural gases will predicted to give steady output. On top of it coal will gives a linear growth after 2006 onwards till the end of the period. Petrol and oil start with 35 units, with slight fluctuation in 1980 to 1985 its gradually increased rapidly from 1995 and will reached to above 45 at the end.
The graph illustrate detail information report generated in the year 2008 and includes energy
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consumption
in America in the period from 1980 to 2030.

In the graph total six types of energy sources
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data. Petrol and Oil are the biggest contributor whereas Nuclear, solar or wing energy and hydropower are the least contributor in 2030.

At the beginning, Nuclear, solar and hydropower
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with equal quadrillion
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up to 5. Hydropower cloud not do much better in era
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, nuclear power
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have been showing
slightly
growth in
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. Wing and solar power predicted to reached maximum 5 quadrillion
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units
from 2010 to the
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end
of the period.

Coal and natural gases gave 15 to 20
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units
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consumption
earlier
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then
at the
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, natural gases will predicted to give steady output. On top of it coal will
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gives
a linear growth after 2006 onwards till the
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end
of the period. Petrol and oil
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with 35
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,
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slight
fluctuation in 1980 to 1985 its
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from 1995 and will reached to above 45 at the
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information form a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

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