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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. LpGR
the bar chart illustrates the data about 5 activities Australian children prefer to do in their spare time. Overall, boys do more of each activity than girls (except for arts and crafts and watching TV or videos). Another visible trend is that, while boys are more active than girls, both still prefer sedentary activities such as TV and video games. The percentage of Australian youngsters in both genders watching TV or videos is equal, at 100%. Electronic or computer games are much more preferred by boys than by girls. The figures are slightly over 80% and 60% respectively. Likewise, bike riding also attracts boys more than girls in their spare time. Boys’ involvement in this activity is nearly 80%, whereas the figure for girls is a little under 60%. Around 40% of 5-to-14-year-old boys enjoy skateboarding or rollerblading, while the proportion of girls at this age is only slightly more than 20%. In contrast, the figure for girls spending their leisure time on art and craft is greater than their male counterparts, at just under 60% and approximately 35% respectively
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bar chart illustrates the data about 5
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activities
Australian children prefer to do in their spare time.

Overall
,
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boys
do more of each
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activity
than
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girls
(
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except for
arts and crafts and watching TV or videos). Another visible trend is that, while
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boys
are more active than
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girls
, both
still
prefer sedentary
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activities
such as TV and video games.

The percentage of Australian youngsters in both genders watching TV or videos is equal, at 100%. Electronic or computer games are much more preferred by
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boys
than by
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girls
. The figures are
slightly
over 80% and 60%
respectively
.
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, bike riding
also
attracts
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boys
more than
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girls
in their spare time.
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involvement in this
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activity
is
nearly
80%, whereas the figure for
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girls
is a
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under 60%.

Around 40% of 5-to-14-year-
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old
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boys
enjoy skateboarding or rollerblading, while the proportion of
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girls
at this age is
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only
slightly
more than 20%.
In contrast
, the figure for
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girls
spending their leisure time on art and craft is greater than their male counterparts, at
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just
under 60% and approximately 35%
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respectively

IELTS academic The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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