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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. BKYX
The chart illustrates which activities male and female children aged between 5 and 14 in Australia opt to enjoy in their leisure time. Overall, the vast majority of kids are keen on indoor audio-visual entertainments and male younger people tend to be more interested in indoor and outdoor games than female friends are. More specifically, watching TV or videos is the most fascinating leisure activity in all the Australian children's eyes while another indoor modern entertainment which is electronic or computer games is ranked second with the consensus of around 80% boys and 60% girls. Kinds of outdoor relaxation are not as attractive when there are about 78% boys and nearly 59% girls desire to ride a bicycle and only approximately a half of these amounts wish to join games using half-pipes. The only activity interesting more number of female joiners is art and craft with nearly 60% girls compared with roughly 38% boys.
The chart illustrates which activities male and female children aged between 5 and 14 in Australia opt to enjoy in their leisure time.
Overall
, the vast majority of kids are keen on indoor audio-visual entertainments and male younger
people
tend to be more interested in indoor and outdoor games than female friends are.

More
specifically
, watching TV or videos is the most fascinating leisure activity in all the Australian children's eyes while another indoor modern entertainment which is electronic or computer games
is ranked
second with the consensus of around 80% boys and 60% girls. Kinds of outdoor relaxation are not as attractive when there are about 78% boys and
nearly
59% girls desire to ride a bicycle and
only
approximately a half of these amounts wish to
join
games using half-pipes. The
only
activity interesting more number of female joiners is art and craft with
nearly
60% girls compared with roughly 38% boys.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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2 paragraphs
154 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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