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The bar chart demonstrates the number of children (from 5 to 14 years old) in Australia who take part in the most interesting leisure activities.

The bar chart demonstrates the number of children (from 5 to 14 years old) in Australia who take part in the most interesting leisure activities. 0JM1
The bar chart demonstrates the number of children (from 5 to 14 years old) in Australia who take part in the most interesting leisure activities. It can be seen clearly that the percentage of boys taking part in skateboarding or rollerblading, bike riding, electronic or computer games was higher than that of girls. To specify, the number of boys choosing to play computer games in their free time was much more popular than that of girls; male accounted for over 80% whereas 60% of girls. Similarly, the percentage of boys riding bike had a significant proportion of about 78%, which was higher than that of girls (58%). Approximately 60% was the figure of both genders going skateboarding or rollerblading (including 38% of boys; 25% of girls). On the other hand, the percentage of female outnumbered the percentage of male when it comes to the rest of categories. In detail, a small minority of male was really into joining in art and craft with 58% while female accounted for 35%. There was an interesting point that the percentage of girls watching Tv or videos was similar to that of boys at 100% Overall, both of genders considered Watching Tv or videos as the best choice to participate in their free time.
The bar chart demonstrates the number of children (from 5 to 14 years
old
) in Australia who
take part
in the most interesting leisure activities.

It can be
seen
clearly
that the
percentage
of
boys
taking part in skateboarding or rollerblading, bike riding, electronic or computer games was higher than that of
girls
. To specify, the number of
boys
choosing to play computer games in their free time was much more popular than that of
girls
; male accounted for over 80% whereas 60% of
girls
.
Similarly
, the
percentage
of
boys
riding bike had a significant proportion of about 78%, which was higher than that of
girls
(58%). Approximately 60% was the figure of both genders going skateboarding or rollerblading (including 38% of
boys
; 25% of girls).

On the other hand
, the
percentage
of female outnumbered the
percentage
of male when it
comes
to the rest of categories. In detail, a
small
minority of male was
really
into joining in art and craft with 58% while female accounted for 35%. There was an interesting point that the
percentage
of
girls
watching
Tv
or videos was similar to that of
boys
at 100%

Overall
, both of genders considered Watching
Tv
or videos as the best choice to participate in their free time.
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IELTS academic The bar chart demonstrates the number of children (from 5 to 14 years old) in Australia who take part in the most interesting leisure activities.

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3 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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