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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

The line graph compares the mortality and fertility proportions in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. It is measured in thousands. Overall, it is clear that the birth and death rate rose with some fluctuations till now, but it is anticipated that the death rate will overtake the birth rate which was initially lower than the birth rate at the start of the period. In terms of death rate, it started at around ten thousand in 1901, but then it fluctuated and reached around thirty thousand in 2001. Afterward, the figure increased gradually, and it is projected to surpass the birth rate in 2041 before roughly stable at about sixty thousand by 2101. With regard to birth rate, the figure stood at twenty thousand in 1901 before experienced fluctuations between 1901 and 2001. Then, this figure is estimated to fall to just above forty thousand by 2101 and reached lower to the birth rate at the end of the period.
The line graph compares the mortality and fertility proportions in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. It
is measured
in thousands.

Overall
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birth
and death
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rate
rose with
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some
fluctuations till
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now
,
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but
it
is anticipated
that the death
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rate
will overtake the
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birth
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rate
which was
initially
lower than the
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birth
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rate
at the
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start
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In terms of death
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, it
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started
at around ten thousand in 1901,
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then it fluctuated and reached around thirty thousand in 2001. Afterward, the figure increased
gradually
, and it
is projected
to surpass the
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birth
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rate
in 2041
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roughly stable at about sixty thousand by 2101.

With regard to
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birth
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rate
, the figure stood at twenty thousand in 1901
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before
experienced fluctuations between 1901 and 2001. Then, this figure
is estimated
to fall to
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just
above forty thousand by 2101 and reached lower to the
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birth
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rate
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end
of the period.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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