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THE GRAPH AND THE TABLE BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE MONTHLY TEMPERATURES AND THE AVERAGE NUMBER OF HOURS OF SUNSHINE PER YEAR IN THREE MAJOR CITIES

THE LINE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE TEMPERATURE CHANGES THROUGHOUT THE YEAR IN THREE DIFFERENT CITIES: LONDON, NY AND SYDNEY. WHILE THE TABLE SHOWS THE NUMBERS RELATED TO THE YEARLY AMOUNT OF HOURS OF SUN IN THE SAME TOWNS. IT CAN BE SEEN FROM THE GRAPH THAT LONDON AND NY FOLLOW A SIMILAR TREND: IN BOTH CITIES JANUARY AND FEBRUARY ARE THE COLDEST MONTHS. DURING THIS PERIOD OF THE YEAR THE AVERAGE TEPERATURE IS AROUND 10C IN LONDON AND 5C IN NY. INSTEAD, JULY AND AGOUST CAN BE IDENTIFIED AS THE HOTTEST MONTHS OF THE YEAR, IN WHICH THE TERMOMETRE RICHS 30C IN NY AND ALMOST 25C IN LONDON. SIDNEY SHOWS AN OPPOSITE TEMPERATURE PATTERN HAVING THE HIGHEST TEMPERATURES BETWEEN DECEMBER AND FEBRUARY, WITH AN AVERAGE OF 25C. WHILE THE LOWEST TEMPERATURE IS RECORDED IN AUGUST WITH A PEAK OF 15C. AS FAR AS THE HOURS OF SUNSHINE ARE CONCERNED, SYDNEY AND NY HAVE ALMOST THE SAME TOTAL AMOUNT OF SUNLIGHT DURING THE YEAR, 2. 500 HOURS IN NY AND 2. 400 IN SYDNEY. WHEREAS LONDON CITIZENS CAN ANJOY JUST 1. 800 OF HOURS OF SUNLIGHT PER YEAR. TO CONCLUDE, NY, BEING AT THE SAME TIME THE HOTTEST AND THE COLDEST CITY, HAS A MAJOR CLIMATE VARIATION THEN LONDON AND SYDNEY. ON HIS HAND, LONDON WITH A YEARLY TOTAL OF JUST 1. 800 HOURS OF SUBSHINE CAN BE DEFINED THE DARKEST TOWN BETWEEN THE THREE. FINALLY, SYDNEY REVEALS THE WARMEST CLIMATE ALL OVER THE YEAR.
THE LINE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE
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TEMPERATURE
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THROUGHOUT THE
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CITIES: LONDON, NY AND SYDNEY. WHILE THE TABLE
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THE NUMBERS RELATED TO THE YEARLY AMOUNT OF
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OF SUN IN THE SAME TOWNS. IT CAN BE
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FROM THE GRAPH THAT LONDON AND NY FOLLOW A SIMILAR TREND: IN BOTH CITIES JANUARY AND FEBRUARY ARE THE COLDEST MONTHS. DURING THIS PERIOD OF THE
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THE AVERAGE
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TEPERATURE
IS AROUND 10C IN LONDON AND 5C IN NY.
INSTEAD
, JULY AND
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AGOUST
CAN
BE IDENTIFIED
AS THE HOTTEST MONTHS OF THE
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, IN WHICH THE
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30C IN NY AND ALMOST 25C IN LONDON. SIDNEY
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PATTERN HAVING THE HIGHEST
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TEMPERATURES
BETWEEN DECEMBER AND FEBRUARY, WITH AN AVERAGE OF 25C. WHILE THE LOWEST
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TEMPERATURE
IS RECORDED
IN AUGUST WITH A PEAK OF 15C. AS FAR AS THE
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HOURS
OF SUNSHINE
ARE CONCERNED
, SYDNEY AND NY HAVE ALMOST THE SAME TOTAL AMOUNT OF SUNLIGHT DURING THE
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, 2. 500
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IN NY AND 2. 400 IN SYDNEY. WHEREAS LONDON CITIZENS CAN
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ANJOY
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1. 800 OF
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TO CONCLUDE
, NY, BEING AT THE SAME TIME THE HOTTEST AND THE COLDEST CITY, HAS A MAJOR CLIMATE VARIATION THEN LONDON AND SYDNEY. ON HIS HAND, LONDON WITH A YEARLY TOTAL OF
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SUBSHINE
CAN
BE DEFINED
THE DARKEST TOWN BETWEEN THE THREE.
FINALLY
, SYDNEY REVEALS THE WARMEST CLIMATE ALL OVER THE
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