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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy consumption in Australian household and greenhouse gas emissions resulting from it, respectively.

The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy consumption in Australian household and greenhouse gas emissions resulting from it, respectively. Overall, as far as energy consumption is concerned, the heating is the most significant part of the chart, while the other appliances are the main culprit of emissions. In comparison, the cooling make up the smallest part of both charts. The first chart represents that nearly half and almost one-third of total energy consumption is contributed to the heating, and water heating, respectively. The other appliances with 15% is the third rank of energy use in an average Australian household. Finally, other small proportions are refrigeration, lighting and cooling accounted for 7%, 4% and 2% in turn. In Australian household, although heating consumed the highest energy, it is responsible for only 15% of emissions. Each of the other appliances and water heating are created approximately one-third of green gas houses. Finally, there are trivial figures in cooling and lighting as they both release the greenhouse gas lower than 8%.
The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of
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energy
consumption in Australian household and greenhouse gas emissions resulting from it,
respectively
.

Overall
, as far as
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energy
consumption
is concerned
, the
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heating
is the most significant part of the chart, while the
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other
appliances are the main culprit of emissions.
In comparison
, the cooling
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the smallest part of both charts.

The
first
chart represents that
nearly
half and almost one-third of total
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energy
consumption
is contributed
to the
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heating
, and water
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heating
,
respectively
. The
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other
appliances with 15% is the third rank of
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energy
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in an average Australian household.
Finally
,
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other
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small
proportions are refrigeration, lighting and cooling accounted for 7%, 4% and 2% in turn.

In Australian household, although
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heating
consumed the highest
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energy
, it is responsible for
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only
15% of emissions. Each of the
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other
appliances and water
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heating
are created
approximately one-third of green gas
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houses
.
Finally
, there are trivial figures in cooling and lighting as they both release the greenhouse gas lower than 8%.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy consumption in Australian household and greenhouse gas emissions resulting from it, respectively.

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