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The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of the figure for energy using in an average Australian households vis-à-vis those of the greenhouse gas emitting by utilizing the same energies which are produced by Australian households.

The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of the figure for energy using in an average Australian households vis-à-vis those of the greenhouse gas emitting by utilizing the same energies which are produced by Australian households. The most striking feature of the pie charts is the most used energy in Australian households belongs to heating which is producing little greenhouse gases. Moreover, water heating is approximately similar in both used energy and greenhouse gas emissions. As is observed, the proportion of refrigeration in used energy accounting for 7% which is half of the percentage of that in greenhouse gas emissions. In used energy, the proportion of water heating, cooling, lighting, and other appliances making up 30%, 2%, 4%, 15% of overall respectively that all of which in greenhouse gas emissions experience a growth, excluding the figure for heating constituting 15% in greenhouse gas emissions; however, it is well under a half of overall in used energy.
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, the proportion of refrigeration in
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accounting for 7% which is half of the percentage of that in
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greenhouse
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gas
emissions. In
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, the proportion of water
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, cooling, lighting, and other appliances making up 30%, 2%, 4%, 15% of
overall
respectively
that all of which in
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greenhouse
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emissions experience a growth, excluding the figure for
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constituting 15% in
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of the figure for energy using in an average Australian households vis-à-vis those of the greenhouse gas emitting by utilizing the same energies which are produced by Australian households.

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