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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. BAEX
The line graph displays the stock values of four different high-tech corporations from 2011 to 2016. Overall, Facebook’s value steadily increased, while Yahoo’s decreased. Apple’s stock price fluctuated wildly throughout the period and Google’s stayed relatively unchanged. Facebook started the period with a stock market valuation of approximately 7, 500 and this consistently moved up in value year on year to reach a peak of around 20, 000 in 2016. Yahoo began the recorded period with a very similar value to Facebook, but in contrast, its stock devalued every year, until it reached a low of about 2, 500 in 2016. Apple stock was valued at just below 5, 000 in 2011 and this jumped dramatically to nearly 35, 000 the following year, before plummeting to around 7, 000 in 2013. It recovered slightly in 2014 to around 12, 000 and subsequently fell to a price of just over 5, 000 in 2016. Google’s shares remained at around 1, 000 for the entire period.
The line graph displays the stock values of four
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different
high-tech

corporations from 2011 to 2016.

Overall
, Facebook’s value
steadily
increased, while Yahoo’s decreased. Apple’s

stock price fluctuated
wildly
throughout the
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period
and Google’s stayed

relatively
unchanged.

Facebook
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started
the
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with a stock market valuation of approximately

7, 500 and this
consistently
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moved
up in value
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year
on
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year
to reach a peak of

around 20, 000 in 2016. Yahoo began the recorded
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period
with a
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very
similar

value to Facebook,
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but
in contrast
, its stock devalued every
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year
, until it

reached a low of about 2, 500 in 2016.

Apple stock
was valued
at
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just
below 5, 000 in 2011 and this jumped

dramatically
to
nearly
35, 000 the following
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year
,
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before
plummeting to

around 7, 000 in 2013. It recovered
slightly
in 2014 to around 12, 000 and

subsequently
fell to a price of
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just
over 5, 000 in 2016. Google’s shares

remained at around 1, 000 for the entire
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IELTS academic The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

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