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The graph above compares amount of male and female of the United Kingdom in attending further education, both part-time and full-time, throughout 1970s until 1990s.

The graph above compares amount of male and female of the United Kingdom in attending further education, both part-time and full-time, throughout 1970s until 1990s. 15XWM
The graph above compares amount of male and female of the United Kingdom in attending further education, both part-time and full-time, throughout 1970s until 1990s. In general, the data shows quite significant rising in both side and in each period of time. It is also clear that majority of UK citizens who attending further education prefer studying part-time than full-time in that period. There's a bit fluctuation in the chart of part-time men student if it is compared with the full-time one which always shows stability and developed considerably. In 1990, part-time men student were decreased about 100. 000 in number. Although it is increased again in the period after, it is not as much as before as in 1970. Britain's women had been much less than men in attending further education. Nevertheless, their number growth gradually. Both part-time and full-time women student were soared in 1970. The amount of full-time women even more than the men ones in that time. In the next period, the number of part-time women student were rocketing. The full-time one also climbed even though it is not as rapid as the part-time one.
The graph above compares amount of male and female of the United Kingdom in

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attending
further
education, both part-time and full-time, throughout 1970s until 1990s.

In general
, the data
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shows
quite significant rising in both side and in each period of

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time
. It is
also
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clear
that majority of UK citizens who attending
further
education prefer studying part-time than full-time in that period.

There's a
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bit
fluctuation in the chart of part-time
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men
student if it
is compared
with the

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full-time
one which always
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shows
stability and developed
considerably
. In 1990, part-time
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men
student
were decreased
about 100. 000 in number. Although
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it


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is
increased again in the period after, it is not as much as
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before
as in 1970.

Britain's women had been much less than
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men
in attending
further
education.

Nevertheless
, their number growth
gradually
. Both part-time and full-time
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women


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student
were soared
in 1970. The amount of full-time women even more than
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the


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men
ones in that time. In the
next
period, the number of part-time women
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student


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were
rocketing. The full-time one
also
climbed
even though
it is not as rapid as
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the


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part-time
one.
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IELTS academic The graph above compares amount of male and female of the United Kingdom in attending further education, both part-time and full-time, throughout 1970s until 1990s.

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