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The given two pie charts illustrate how different industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey in percentage in the years 2000 and 2016.

The given two pie charts illustrate how different industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey in percentage in the years 2000 and 2016. VywBK

The given two pie charts illustrate how different industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey in percentage in the years 2000 and 2016. Overall, at the beginning of the period agriculture made the highest contribution to the economy, whereas construction made the smallest part of the chart. In comparison, by the end of the span, the biggest part belonged to healthcare and education. Meanwhile, finance, business and other services were the least contributed to the economy. As is presented in charts agriculture contributed the most to the Turkish economy almost a quarter of the chart (in 2000). This was followed by a decrease in 2016 when the statistic declined from 24% to 14%. In 2000 construction made up only 3%, however next period it increased by 7% and made up one-tenth. Interesting to note, that healthcare and education remained constant throughout the whole span. The minor insignificant changes experienced financial services and manufacturing. Both of them increased approximately by 4% reaching 8% and 12%. Government, leisure and hospitality shrank from the initial percentage. The former showed a downward trend from 17% to 14% and the latter from 12% to 9%.

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