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The diagram provides an outline of the stage in generating electricity from the water. This process commences with water in the ocean and concludes with power being provided to relevant infrastructure.

The diagram provides an outline of the stage in generating electricity from the water. This process commences with water in the ocean and concludes with power being provided to relevant infrastructure. AJwww
The diagram provides an outline of the stage in generating electricity from the water. This process commences with water in the ocean and concludes with power being provided to relevant infrastructure. The process commences with the energy from the sun made the seawater heated, causing it to evaporate. The water rises and forms into clouds products rainfall, which will fall into a reservoir. The water collected in this area is kept back by a dam that can be opened with a valve to release water down a hill. When the water valve is released, water flows down the hill and spin a turbine, sending electricity through high-voltages cables to a transformer station. At this point, the power into a voltage that is suitable for electricity need of the local area. An extra point to note is that after the water passes through the turbines which go back to the pump. The water in pump back up into the reservoir so that it can be used to meet electricity demands in the future.
The diagram provides an outline of the stage in generating
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electricity
from the
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water
. This process commences with
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water
in the ocean and concludes with power
being provided
to relevant infrastructure.

The process commences with the energy from the sun made the seawater heated, causing it to evaporate. The
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water
rises and forms into clouds products rainfall, which will fall into a reservoir.
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The
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water
collected in this area is
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kept
back by a dam that can
be opened
with a valve to release
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water
down a hill. When the
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water
valve
is released
,
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water
flows down the hill and spin a turbine, sending
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electricity
through high-voltages cables to a transformer station. At this point, the power into a voltage
that is
suitable for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electricity
need of the local area.

An extra point to note is that after the
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water
passes through the turbines which go back to the pump. The
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water
in pump back up into the reservoir
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so
that it can be
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used
to
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meet
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electricity
demands in the future.
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IELTS academic The diagram provides an outline of the stage in generating electricity from the water. This process commences with water in the ocean and concludes with power being provided to relevant infrastructure.

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