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The maps illustrate the different between in the cinema in 1980 and its appearance now.

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The maps illustrate the different between in the cinema in 1980 and its appearance now. Overall, it can be seen clearly that the number of cinemas are more than the past. While some structures have no change, some others are knocked down or added. In 1980, there were only 2 cinemas, one was on the right-hand side of the theater, opposite the toilet, another was at the left corner, near the entrance. The car park was located at the end of the cinema. Now, there are a lot of changes in the theater. The number of cinemas increase to 5 compared to 2 in the past. The position of cinema 1 and 2 have changed, while cinema 3, 4 and 5 are erected to the left side. The car park is destroyed to make a way for more cinemas. The food drinks and relax room are built on the place of cinema 1. While the ticket area and toilet have no change, the DVD shop next to it is converted to Drinks.
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in 1980 and its appearance
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now
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clearly
that the number of
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cinemas
are more than the past. While
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change
,
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others
are knocked
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added
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In 1980, there were
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2
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cinemas
, one was on the right-hand side of the theater, opposite the toilet, another was at the
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left
corner, near the entrance. The car park
was located
at the
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end
of the cinema.

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Now
, there are
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a lot of
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changes
in the theater. The number of
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cinemas
increase to 5
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to 2 in the past. The position of
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cinema
1 and 2 have
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changed
, while
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cinema
3, 4 and 5
are erected
to the
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left
side.
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car park is
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destroyed
to
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make
a way for more
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cinemas
.
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The
food drinks and relax room
are built
on the place of
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cinema
1. While the ticket area and toilet have no
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change
, the DVD shop
next
to it
is converted
to Drinks.

IELTS academic The maps illustrate the different between in the cinema in 1980 and its appearance now.

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6.0
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