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The given two maps delineate the information about a city in 1950 before and after development.

The given two maps delineate the information about a city in 1950 before and after development. QKwg9
The given two maps delineate the information about a city in 1950 before and after development. Overall, after scrutinizing the whole data it can be inferred that there is a drastic changes and developments in the city and the count of the census. In 1950, the population of the city was 20000 and there was a small area in the north for resident’s houses and business district. Moreover, on the east side of the city there was a small airport and a river in the southern part which occupies more than 40 percent of area. However, currently, there is a tremendous increase in the natives of this area which is two hundred thousand. Residential area expanded to all four sides of the city though it was only in the north in 1950. There is a new dam in the southeast part of the city and a lake under the bridge. Lastly the airport has expanded and it is now double the size of it used to be in the past.
The
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two maps delineate the information about a city in 1950
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before
and after development.

Overall
, after scrutinizing the whole data it can
be inferred
that there is a drastic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
and developments in the city and the count of the census.

In 1950, the population of the city was 20000 and there was a
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small
area in the north for resident’s
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houses
and business district.
Moreover
, on the east side of the city there was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
airport and a river in the southern part which occupies more than 40 percent of area.

However
,
currently
, there is a tremendous increase in the natives of this area which is two hundred thousand. Residential area expanded to all four sides of the city though it was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in the north in 1950. There is a new dam in the southeast part of the city and a lake under the bridge.
Lastly
the airport has expanded and it is
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now
double the size of it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be in the past.

IELTS academic The given two maps delineate the information about a city in 1950 before and after development.

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