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The given table shows the percentages of optional sports and activities participation of people over 15 among men and women in Australia from 2011 to 2012.

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The given table shows the percentages of optional sports and activities participation of people over 15 among men and women in Australia from 2011 to 2012. It can be seen that walking for exercise attracted the largest number of both male and female participants, followed by fitness and gym activities. According to the chart, a much larger percentage of women involved in walking for exercise than men, 30% compared with 17%. However, women were less likely to engage in cycling and cardio training, almost 6% less than men. But, fewer men than women preferred to go swimming and to do yoga, netball activities. The proportion of males who were interested in tennis and basketball was higher than these figures for the opposite gender. The most noticeable feature of the table is that a significant proportion of males were playing golf, football and basketball, whereas no women participated in such kinds of activities.
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the percentages of optional sports and activities participation of
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over 15 among
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in Australia from 2011 to 2012.

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that walking for exercise attracted the largest number of both male and female participants, followed by fitness and gym activities.

According to the chart, a much larger percentage of
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women
involved in walking for exercise than
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men
, 30% compared with 17%.
However
,
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women
were less likely to engage in cycling and cardio training, almost 6% less than
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men
.
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, fewer
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men
than
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women
preferred to go swimming and to do yoga, netball activities.

The proportion of males who
were interested
in tennis and basketball was higher than these figures for the opposite gender. The most noticeable feature of the table is that a significant proportion of males were playing golf, football and basketball, whereas no
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women
participated in such kinds of activities.

IELTS academic The given table shows the percentages of optional sports and activities participation of people over 15 among men and women in Australia from 2011 to 2012.

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