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Crime and punishment in prison

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A large number of criminals who serve their first prison sentence, leave prison only to reoffend. This is mainely because of the lack of rehabilitation and difficulty finding regular employment once released There are a number of soluations which hould beimplemented to deal with criminals who reoffend. Firstly, the reason for most first-time offenders committing crimes again, once they have been released from prison, is due to the lack of rehabilitation whilest in prison. In other world, offenders are not given a chance to retain and learn new skills for their future or develop a deeper understanding of correct moral behaviour and instead mix with other criminals, which only strnthens their criminal intentions. Secondly, repeat offending is also owing to difficulty in finding emplyment after being released. As a result, many of them struggle financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences. There are to effective solutionsto the problem of repeat offenders. One way to tackle this is to ensure that all crimes entering prison are given the chance to retain with useful skills which will hopefully ensure them a job after they have served their sentence. By doing this, it will help them reintegrate back into society and give them some means of supporting themselves financially. Another method of dealing with criminals wh reoffended is to have more supervision and checks in place when they are back in society. This solution would hopefully prevent them from taking any chances and deter them from reoffending because they are being so closely watched. In conclusion, having training in prison and also close observatio when first time offenders are released are effective in dealing with the issue. If governments implemented these solutions, crime figures would soon drop.
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IELTS academic Crime and punishment in prison

Academic
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288 words
5.5
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