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The given table provides information about the percentage of attendance to different secondary schools: specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009 respectively.

The given table provides information about the percentage of attendance to different secondary schools: specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009 respectively. kxVWd
The given table provides information about the percentage of attendance to different secondary schools: specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009 respectively. Overall, as it can be clearly seen, specialized schools almost remained constant all years. Although, at the beginning of the period Voluntary controlled school demonstrated the highest proportion of students, community school outraced it at the end of the span. In 2000 only 12% was noticed in specialist school and in the remaining years it was falling down by 1%, consequently in 2009 it showed 10%. Grammar school experienced a downward trend too. At the beginning of the span it had just below a quarter of attendees, in 2005 it demonstrated 19%. In 2009 it decreased two times than the initial percentage. The voluntary controlled school made up just over a half of the population in 2000, whereas the community demonstrated only 12%. However, this was followed by a significant decrease by 14% and then by 18% for voluntary direction. Meanwhile, community school showed an upward trend by 20% in 2005. By 2009 it reached the highest point at 58%.
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: specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and
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community
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in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009
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, specialized
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almost remained constant all years. Although, at the beginning of the period Voluntary controlled
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demonstrated the highest proportion of students,
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community
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outraced it at the
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and in the remaining years it was falling down by 1%,
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10%. Grammar
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experienced a downward trend too. At the beginning of the span it had
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below a quarter of attendees, in 2005 it demonstrated 19%. In
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times
than the initial percentage.

The voluntary controlled
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made up
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over a half of the population in 2000, whereas the
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an upward trend by 20% in 2005. By 2009 it reached the highest point at 58%.

IELTS academic The given table provides information about the percentage of attendance to different secondary schools: specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009 respectively.

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