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The chart below gives information about the tourists who visited diffrent places and the bar graph gives information about the number of tourists from different countries.

The chart below gives information about the tourists who visited diffrent places and the bar graph gives information about the number of tourists from different countries. 5BeNp
The line graph elucidates the information about travellers who visited different places and the bar graph illustrates data of the number of tourists. Additionally, Spaine describe the higest rate of tourists among other countries. Overall, Museums was at top position in the list and monuments were got bottom prefrence at the starting the period while hill station got hight priority than museums at the end of the give year. Looking the further details, it is clearly seen from the line graph that beaches and museums trend was goes parallel from 1950 to mid 1990 at the starting pint museums 100 out od 100 prefrence while beaches at 70 figure. Moreover, monuments were stared from 10 at the end of the 2000 it went at 25 figure. Hill station prefrence shows wide range fluctuations. Shifting towards the bar chart, it describe that Ireland had only 3 millions travellers which was the lowest figure of the country. Spaine had 10 millions tourist followed by USA it had 9 figure. While France and Germany had 8 and 5 million respectively.
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Spaine
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prefrence
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trend was goes parallel from 1950 to mid 1990 at the starting pint
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prefrence
while beaches at 70
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of the 2000 it went at 25
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only
3 millions
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of the country.
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had 10 millions tourist followed
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. While France and Germany had 8 and 5 million
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about the tourists who visited diffrent places and the bar graph gives information about the number of tourists from different countries.

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